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Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter •say how long you now want to rent the apartment for •explain why your plans have changed •tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

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Dear Mr. Smith, I hope
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 message finds you well. I am writing to request your permission to extend my rental period for the apartment by an additional six months. My circumstances have changed recently, and I need more time to focus on my work. The administration office has requested that I continue my current role, which is conveniently located near
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 apartment. Given that I have become more settled in
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 area, I believe it would be beneficial for me to stay longer.
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, I would like to bring to your attention an issue I am experiencing with the lock on the main door. It has been quite difficult to open lately, and I worry that I may not be able to enter the apartment, especially late at night. Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response. Kind regards, Chris
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coherence cohesion
Your letter could benefit from a brief concluding sentence summarizing your request to ensure clarity.
task achievement
Consider including specific details about your work that may have changed to support your reason for extending the rental period.
task achievement
The letter maintains a professional and courteous tone throughout, which is suitable for this context.
coherence cohesion
Each section of the letter maintains a clear and focused paragraph, effectively organizing ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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