The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 1

The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in the furniture industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 1
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The diagram provides information about the manufacturing process of steel rods in the furniture industry.
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, the process consists of the eleven stages involved in the production. It begins with melting raw materials and concludes with a final inspection before the material is ready for use. To start, a combination of iron ore, yellow ore, and carbon is placed into a specialised container which is inserted into the melting slit to make a smooth consistency at the temperature of 1300-1500 degrees Celsius.
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, it is transferred into a smelting cabin to refine. Once purified, the substance is poured into ingots, which are connected to a cooling reservoir. Here, it is cooled at a temperature of between 60 and 100 degrees Celsius to convert into tough metal, allowing it to pass through nozzles.
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strands of cooled metal move to the rollers, where they are rolled into a circle shape.
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, they undergo heating treatment in a heating device before automatic equipment checks the surface measurements. At the next stage, steel rods with correct measurements can be cut into appropriate lengths by a cutter. Having been cut, they are stamped with ID marks.
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, the quality of materials is inspected before being distributed to customers.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacturing
  • steel rods
  • furniture industry
  • steel billets
  • furnace
  • rollers
  • diameter
  • coiled
  • wire reels
  • cooling process
  • sprayed
  • temperature
  • harden
  • cut
  • bundled
  • distribution
  • furniture manufacturers
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