92.Some people think that children should go to school as early as possible where as others believe they should wait until they are 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the present world, It is argued that children should be enrolled in school as early as possible,
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others feel that parents should wait until children are seven years old. I believe that
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early admission can reduce working parents' burdens and allow enough time for children to perceive knowledge, enrolling them when they are more mature is
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essential because they are better able to tackle environmental changes and have better cognitive development.
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Include more specific examples or evidence to support your arguments. This will strengthen your essay and provide a more comprehensive task response.
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Ensure that you have a strong conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your opinion.
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You have presented both views clearly, which demonstrates a good understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
There is a logical flow in your essay, which helps in understanding your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical developmental period
  • foundational skills
  • learning difficulties
  • long-term academic outcomes
  • structured learning environments
  • emotional and social development
  • mental health
  • well-rounded development
  • natural pace of childhood development
  • cognitive and personal growth
  • mature emotionally and socially
  • structured demands
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