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Healthcare should not be provided for free regardless of a person’s income. The health of a person is in their own hands and they should, therefore, be held accountable for that. To what extend do you agree with this opinion?

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These days, Many
people
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a
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good food
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 of
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exercise
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increasing
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worried
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their
 health issue. Some
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 might though it is responsible for each person to pay their
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 when they go to
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however
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 have a different perception. In
this
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their
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their
 own fees for
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treatment
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 and I will discuss the
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 benefit that each person could
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receive
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receive
 after they
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 tax
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government
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the government
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 It is commonly believed that healthcare should be
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basis
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 benefit for each citizen in any country in
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 world. Heath
issue
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is
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 not impact only
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thier
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their
 own
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country
i
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they
 could impact the whole world
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goverment
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government
 ignores a
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spread to the whole
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society
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sould
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should
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free
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 as part of
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 salary deducted
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a
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tax. It should be a return of any
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beneficial
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 as facilities,
trasportation
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transportation
 and especially healthcare. In
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conclusion
, I totally disagree
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 the idea that
people
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 have to be held accountable for
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thier
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their
treatment
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while
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a part
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apart
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 they pay is a high rate
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of tax
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 for
government
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the government
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 each year.

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style
Avoid using informal phrases such as "these days"; instead, opt for formal transitions.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clearer separation and logical progression between main points and supporting examples.
task achievement
Try to develop ideas more thoroughly with a mix of examples and detailed explanation.
coherence cohesion
The essay has both an introduction and a conclusion, contributing to a coherent structure.
task achievement
You present a clear stance on the topic, emphasizing your disagreement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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