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cyclists and car drivers sharing the same road causes some problems. What are the problems and what can be done to reduce them?

#cyclists #car #drivers #road
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Most of the roads are not designed to accommodate
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cycle
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cycles
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 and cars at the same time.
Cyclists
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 and
car
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drivers
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 sharing the same
road
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 causes problems
such
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 as
traffic
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congestion
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,
accidents
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 especially at night,
road
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 rage and stress. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both problems and their recommended solutions. When
cyclists
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 and
car
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drivers
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 share
a
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the
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 same lane,
their
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there
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 might be chances of
traffic
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congestion
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 because
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cycle
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the cycle
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 cannot increase speed suddenly
that
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which
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 may lead to other vehicles slowing down.
In addition
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 to that,
car
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drivers
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 show some rage towards
cyclists
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while
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 driving and it may end up with
accidents
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. Particularly, night
accidents
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 are common because cycles don't come with
headlight
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headlights
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 and
indicator
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indicators
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. Sometimes,
traffic
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congestion
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 indirectly affects
environment
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the environment
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 by releasing more carbon dioxide.
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, In Germany,
the
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apply
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road
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 was constructed with narrow
lane
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lanes
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 and reported more
cycle
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accidents
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due to
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aggressive
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the aggressive
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behavior
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behaviour
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 of
the
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car
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drivers
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. Governments should design
the
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apply
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road
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roads
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 which accommodate both
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cycle
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cycles
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 and cars but in different lanes. Most importantly,
cyclists
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 should ride their bikes at
left
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the left
a left
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 corner without
distrubing
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disturbing
 other vehicles.
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,
countries
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in countries
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 like
the
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apply
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India and Russia, separate roads are designed for
cycle
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 riders that won't affect others.
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, installing headlights and indicators helps other
drivers
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 to know which direction they are turning.
Atleast
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At least
, cycles should have radium stickers
in
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at
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 night to avoid
accidents
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.
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Radium
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 reflects light and
drivers
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 know someone is before them and slows down. In conclusion, even though
cyclists
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 sharing
same
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the same
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road
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 with
car
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drivers
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 causes
accidents
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 and
traffic
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congestion
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, with proper precautions and measures it can be avoided. Measures
such
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 as
cyclists
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 riding in their respective lanes and using
headlight
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headlights
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 and
indicator
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indicators
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 can reduce half of the problem.
Drivers
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 should
give
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respect
to
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apply
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each other without their
difference
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differences
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 in vehicles.
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task achievement
In your essay, you have addressed the prompt thoroughly by discussing both the problems of cyclists and car drivers sharing the same road and the potential solutions. To improve further, ensure that each point is explored with more depth and detail to strengthen your task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, and the paragraphs are generally connected logically. However, try to make the transitions between ideas smoother, using more varied linking words and phrases.
task achievement
While you have provided some examples, they can be more specific and detailed to better illustrate your points. Try to incorporate more concrete statistics or case studies if possible.
language
Check for consistent use of singular and plural forms, and ensure all nouns and verbs agree in terms of number. Although small inaccuracies won't majorly impact your score, consistency is key for a higher score.
task achievement
You were able to identify the core issues of cyclists and car drivers on the same road and provided practical solutions, showcasing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which helps in maintaining coherence throughout the essay.
task achievement
The use of specific countries as examples helps ground your essay in real-world contexts.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban areas
  • road space
  • accidents
  • safety concerns
  • differences in speed and size
  • vulnerable
  • severe injuries
  • road rage
  • frustration
  • aggressive behavior
  • infrastructure
  • road design
  • unsafe conditions
  • environmental impact
  • emissions
  • environmental degradation
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