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The chart below provides information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including future prediction. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below provides information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including future prediction. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrate
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 the urban population which increased in different regions of the world from 1950 to 2000 with
future
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the future
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 predicted in 2030.
overall
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 prediction
show
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 population in three
region
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regions
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 is about to dramatically increase.
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However
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 Africa and Asia are around the same
percent
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per cent
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in total
that
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keep
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 the whole world down from reaching more. in different years Africa and Asia are close to
same
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 number,
actually
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 Asia is the values
of
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a
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slightly over Africa. but they had
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an exact
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 gross
with
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 39% in 2000 .
in
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other
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the other
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hand
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 Latin America have hard
growing
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 that
make
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has made
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 it
to become
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 larger one in all the years.
Certainly
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 the predicted percentage in Latin America is the higher one with 80%, respectively.
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 the total numbers in three regions whole world
have
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increase
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increased
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 steadily from 30% in 9050 to 60% in 2030 which is exactly double
increase
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 .
while
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 development
in
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 2000 to 2030 is not impressive.
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