The graph below shows the total births and the deaths in a European country from 1950 to 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and give comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the total births and the deaths in a European country from 1950 to 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and give comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the total births and deaths in a European country between 1950 and 2050.
Overall
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, the birth
rate
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had the highest number, but declined throughout the year.
However
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, it was replaced by the death
rate
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. It had the highest figure
at the end
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of the period
To begin
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with, the birth
rate
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had started at approximately 800000 at the beginning of the period.
Then
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,
this
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figure had risen markedly to 1000000 in 1970. Following that, it had a decline moderately to just under 600000 in 1990. After that, soared minimally to about 700000 before maintaining the same level until the end of the year.
On the other hand
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, the death
rate
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ranked second with approximately 700000 in 1950. Afterwards, it increased to just over 700000 in 1970 and dropped slowly to just under 700000 by 2030.
At the end
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of the time,
this
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number had risen to 800000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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