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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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 line graph illustrates a comparison
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 the percentage of
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people
their
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age
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 65 and above from 1940 to 2040 in Japan, Sweden and
USA
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the USA
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.
overall
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, it can be clearly seen
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 of the comparison
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that Japan
it
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will contain the highest number of old people in future
year
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years
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. looking in more detail,In Sweden, there was an
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increase
 and fluctuation in the percentage of old people.
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 between1960 and 2020 the
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number
 rose gradually from 10% to 20%
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 it will
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reach
reached
 a peak of over 25% in 2040. in the first year ,
USA'
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 rate was the highest in the percentage of those
over65
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over 65
 age about 10% and after
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 it remained constant from 1980 to 2020 at exactly 15%.
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this
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propratoin
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preparation
 will claim till under 25%.
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, the ratio of Japan showed a
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downward
 trend in the
numper
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number
 of
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seniors
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. For
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instance
, between 1940 and 1980 the number declined from 5% to around 2%.
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, the rate
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 to 10% in 2022. There is an expectation
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that
 the rate of old people will continue to rise till it
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peaks
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 29% in 2040.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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