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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.thr

The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.thr
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The given map illustrates the village and three possible areas for a leisure centre.
Overall
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, there are many trees,
apartments
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, factories, a large river, and roads.
In addition
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, the first possible
region
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 is located near the factories. The second possible
location
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 is
sited
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in
residential
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a residential
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region
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. The third possible field is placed in the west of the village. The second possible
location
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 is
good
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a good
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 place to build a leisure building. Because
,
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 the
location
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 is positioned along the
apartments
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while
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 other zones
is
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are
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 far from the residential area.
This
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 means that individuals will feel comfortable compared to the other regions.
Moreover
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, the first possible
region
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 might harm
to
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people, especially children, because of pollutants and polluted
airs
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air
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.
In contrast
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, the third possible
region
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 is near the forest.
However
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, the third possible
region
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 is too far from the
apartments
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, so it is not accessible
although
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 they can drive along the roads. To summarize, the village has the forest, the factories, the
apartments
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, the river and the traffic lines. After considering possible
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location
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locations
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 in a careful manner, the second possible
location
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 is
better
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a better
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 choice than other sites.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words apartments, region, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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