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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss bot these views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
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peopal
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people
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changeing
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changing
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batter
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comfort
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better
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Body paragraph 1
Some
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 their lives doing the same thing and avoiding change.Morevor, the peopal are like comfartavel, bkos the yeang genration are semart to work or other sakter the peopal are thinking to change old moduls.
Body paragraph 2
In
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other
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the other
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, hand
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 think that change is always
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good and bad thinking . like how to
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improve
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 work and deep thinking,
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, the old people prefer to
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future
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problems
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solution
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thinking
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both
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them
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Conclusion
In my opinion
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the
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young
peopal
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people
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short
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tham
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than
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Work on sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity. Replacing informal expressions with more academic language will improve the response.
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Include clear examples to support your points. This will better illustrate your arguments and demonstrate understanding of both perspectives.
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Improve coherence by organizing ideas logically: start with an introduction, expand on different views, and conclude with your opinion.
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The essay acknowledges both perspectives on change, which shows a balanced approach to the topic.
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An attempt is made to include an opinion, suggesting engagement with the question.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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