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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in town in Australia are currently attending. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main futures,and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in town in Australia are currently attending. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main futures,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the proportion
on
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of
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 the
location
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locations
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 and types currently attending
of
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dance
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 classes children in Australia town.
Overall
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, Private studios
is held
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 the largest place for citizens who
is
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interest
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of
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dance
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 classes
in
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at
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 48%.
Compare
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 to
population
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a population
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 who pay attention to
College based
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college-based
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 studios is only 10%.
Acording
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According
from
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 the bar chart,
individual
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individuals
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ageing
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 under 11 years old
accouting
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accounting
 for
type
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the type
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 of
dance
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 classes slightly more interested
from
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 Modern, Tap, through Ballet is around 500, 450, and 300 respectively.
While
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 Ballet was paid attention
in
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the age
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age
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ages
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 of 11-16 years old
in
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600 number of student ,tap is 400, Modern is 300. From the
detail
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 Location of
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dance
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the dance
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 chart,
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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