With the advancement in healthcare and technology, people now have a longer lifespan. Some argue that the retirement age which is normally 60 to 65 years of age should be adjusted to 70 years or even higher. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? Give reason and example to state your stance

Nowadays,

people

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are experiencing longer life

period

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due to

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the improvement

of

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health

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and technology quality. In the past, only

few

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a few

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made it

until

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to

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70, but nowadays majority can live healthily until the

age

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of 80.

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phenomenon,

people

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are arguing whether the retirement

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for working could be added up

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to 5

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-10

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to 70

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old or later. I opine that the changing

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policy is not necessary and should only be done with several conditions. In

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essay, I am going to talk about the two sides considering

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issue: physical

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and mental readiness. Talking about retirement

age

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, the most important factor is

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problem

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.

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some elderly might appear to be in their prime condition,

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apply

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we can not resist that the body is

aging

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and has

totally

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different endurance than when they were younger. The current healthcare might solve complex issues.

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, assuming that

people

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start working

since

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25

years

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old and stop

until

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at

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65,

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apply

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forty

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should be

an

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enough period for the body to work.

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,

majority

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of office workers are required to sit for a long time and commute every day.

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, in Japan,

people

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spend more than 9 hours a day

to go

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to the office,

do

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their

job

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jobs

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, and

go

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home. The hours can be longer when they do overwork.

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, I do not think it is necessary to put the physical burden longer by postponing the deadline when someone is already 65

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old. On the other side, fully

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working is not an easy milestone to conquer.

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one's physical condition is important to think of, some find it hard to accept the fact that they are no longer productive and earning money. The mental readiness is another factor to talk about. Not everyone

feel

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at peace to put an end to their income source, they would rather have something to do every day.

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, a part-time job for elders can be an option. By

doing

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working

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part-time, retired workers are able to work in less hours, still

earning

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money, and be productive. Several countries

such

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as

Philippines

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the Philippines

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and Singapore have

adapted

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this

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.

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,

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opportunity connects them

in

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to

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a new community, too. In conclusion,

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the current era has shown an increasing life period, it does not mean the retirement rules need to be added up.

Health

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issues

comes

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first when thinking about the urgency of

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matter.

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, another option

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as part-time work can be done for those who are still willing to be active.