The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in four various counties of Europe- Germany, Italy, France and Austria from the year 1995 up to 2005.
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The graph illustrates the expenditure on books in four different countries between the years 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, all four European nations were on an increasing trend, with Germany remaining the top spender throughout the years. Austria used to have the least amount of money spent in 1995,
however
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, the number started to rise from 2001 onwards.
To begin
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,
while
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always has the highest amount of
expense
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on books, Germany
also
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had an increase in spending from 80
million
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to nearly 100
million
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US
dollars
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. Meanwhile, France, the second highest,
also
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had a gradual rise from approximately 55
million
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to slightly more than 70
million
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dollars
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.
Moreover
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, Austrian people had the most changes in purchasing books.
Although
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they had a slow growth at
first,
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in 2001, there was a rapid change from 40
million
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to around 70
million
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dollars
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, which exceeded the Italian.
Lastly
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, Italy has the slowest growth among these countries, from 50 to 60
million
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dollars
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • expenditure
  • fluctuations
  • economic factors
  • population changes
  • cultural shifts
  • spending patterns
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • projection
  • implications
  • data reliability
  • comparative analysis
  • highest/lowest expenditure
  • investments in literature
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
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