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The table shows information about students at an Australian university in 2009.

The table shows information about students at an Australian university in 2009.
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The given table compares the percentage of
families
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,
students
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who
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 first language
not
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 English and
students
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 who
born
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were born
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 outside
Australia
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 in terms of
field
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 at an Australian university in 2009.
Overall
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,
while
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humanities
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 was the most popular
field
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 of study for
students
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 with
families
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,
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technology
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 was the most studied
field
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 for
students
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 whose
their
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English is not native and those born in rural
Australia
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. As the table shows, the index of study
humanities
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 was the most preferable 72%
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students
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 with
families
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.
Also
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, the
field
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 of education took
a
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second place with 68% among
families
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.
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,
information
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technology
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 and engineering were the least
interested
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 for women at 17% and 15% respectively.When it comes to Science and Physics were a bit similar 52% and 56% of
families
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 studied. Regarding,
for
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international
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students
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students,
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 the
field
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 of
information
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technology
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 was the most interesting with 49% and the
field
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 of science and engineering took
a
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second place at 45% and 42% respectively.And the direction of study
humanities
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 and the
field
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 of education were the least popular with 12% and 16% respectively.When it comes to
students
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 who
born
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were born
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 in rural
Australia
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 the
field
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 of Physics and
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Technology
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were
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 the most popular at 56%.The
field
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 of engineering and science took
a
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second place at 48% and 31% respectively among
students
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 who
born
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were born
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 outside
Australia
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.
And the
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 least common fields were
humanities
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 and education at 20% and 23% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, students, australia, field, humanities, information, technology with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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