The chart below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the part that students who studied in England who were bilingual and able to talk in other
languages
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besides
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English from 2000 to 2010 .
Overall
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, the segment of no other language was smaller in 2010 which means more
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students were able to talk .
Also
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in 2010 segment of two other
languages
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was twice as large as in 2000.
However
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, others had Visible Changes too.
On the other hand
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,Spanish learners were the largest segment that somehow dominated the chart in both years and in 2010 had 5% more users than in 2000.But the percentage of
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Germans
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had no difference after 10 years the number is only 10% respectively. After 10 years another language
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joined University students with 5% bigger than 2000 which was 15%.
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This
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These languages
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languages
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could be anything .The chart
show
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shows
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the special percentage with
also
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5% growth in 2010 which is two individual
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • additional languages
  • proficiency
  • decade
  • trends in language learning
  • globalization
  • cultural shifts
  • inferred
  • shifted
  • popularity
  • decrease/increase in speakers
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