Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other believe it is a good to have who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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who prefer to be
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people
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that having
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who
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unbiased
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opinion
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are more
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beneficial
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points. In
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world,
people
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often find
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themselves
feeling lonely and isolated from
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others. In
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sircumstances
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circumstances
, they tend to look for
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who possess the same
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. Having the company of
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people
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makes them feel connected and more relatable to
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others.
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, they find it more comfortable and consider it
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a safe space to express themselves fully.
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, if a person is fond of writing about a particular topic, he would be more encouraged by
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who are interested and share the same liking. On the other side, having
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who sometimes
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contradict
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has its own benefits.
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, you might not like that person as he/she does not share the same
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but that person would always provide
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stance.
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which
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can make you more clear about a situation and
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you to
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better
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. For
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example
, if you wrote a book you need
someone
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who can give an honest review about it, rather than
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who just uses
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sugar
coated words. In my
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, those
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who
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you make
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better
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choices in life are the best. It is
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beneficial
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who makes you aware
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the harsh reality
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someone
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who pushes you
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worst
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situations just to be in your good books.
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Add more specific examples to support your points, which will provide stronger evidence for your arguments.
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Try to provide a more balanced discussion of both views in the body paragraphs to ensure a comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
Revise to correct spelling mistakes and improve the fluency of sentences, enhancing overall readability.
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You've identified both sides of the argument clearly in your introduction.
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The conclusion effectively presents your own opinion which aligns with the discussion presented.
coherence cohesion
The essay manages a logical structure, with each paragraph devoted to discussing one side of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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