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Band 7.5

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

#friend #holiday #region #information #advice #offer #area #clothes
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Dear Jass, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in radiant health and good spirits. It's been a
while
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 since we met each other. I'm quite excited since I received a letter in which you wrote about your plan to visit my town next month.
Firstly
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, have you found any place to stay during your trip? I can assist you as my town has numerous famous Hotels, Airbnb and Motels but my recommendation is Hilton Toronto.
However
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, you've to book a room in advance, because
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 city is full of visitors during New Year's Eve. In terms of activities, you can pay a visit to Wonderland where you can enjoy different rides with a lot of food options available inside . Apart from that Toronto Downtown have various malls, shopping complexes, museums, zoos and CN Tower. As per my suggestion, you should bring a pair of warm clothes, a jacket and snow shoes as the temperature always stays low during the winter season. I look forward to seeing you soon. Best Regards Tajinder Singh
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task achievement
Consider providing more details or personal recommendations for places to visit, along with reasons why they are interesting or special.
coherence cohesion
Incorporate more transitional phrases or linking words to ensure smooth transition between related ideas and paragraphs.
greeting and closing
The letter opens with a warm and friendly tone, making the reader feel welcomed and valued.
single idea per paragraph
Clear paragraphs focus on offering help, suggesting activities, and recommending clothing, exhibiting good task response.
task achievement
Useful and practical information is provided, addressing the friend's needs effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • cultural events
  • outdoor activities
  • regional cuisine
  • seasonal weather
  • suitable clothing
  • local recommendations
  • hospitality
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