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The map shows the village of Chorleywood showing development between 1868 and 1994. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the village of Chorleywood showing development between 1868 and 1994. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the
village
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 of Chorleywood showing
development
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 over the
period
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 1868 to 1994.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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 the growth of
development
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 showed
larger
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a larger
the larger
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 change
in
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from
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first
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the first
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period
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 to
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at
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the end of
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period
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the period
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.
In addition
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, rail added
continue
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continued
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to
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until
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 1909. Looking at the map more closely, the
most small
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smallest
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area
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 of
this
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village
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saw
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was
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in
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 1868 to 1883. next
area
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 witnessed in 1883 by 1922. In the case of
next
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the next
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development
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, it saw 1922 to 1970, and
biggest
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the biggest
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development
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along
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during
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all
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the
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period
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whole period
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 experienced in 1970 to 1994. Originally, the main road
constructed
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was constructed
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 in
the
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apply
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Chorleywood.
in
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In
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 1970,
Motorway
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a Motorway
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built
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was built
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at
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on
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 the right side of
this
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village
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. and
then
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,
railway
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the railway
a railway
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built
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was built
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 under the map.
This
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village
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 increased all of the
period
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, so in the future, Chorleywood would
saw
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see
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rapidly
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rapid
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development
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.
Finally
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,
extra
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the extra
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area
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 might charged with
other new
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another new area
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area
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, development, period, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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