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The charts below illustrate the global distribution of water resources and the water consumption patterns across three countries.

The charts below illustrate the global distribution of water resources and the water consumption patterns across three countries.
The pie charts illustrate the distribution of the world's
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,
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 the bar graph highlights
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 usage in three countries (Saudi Arabia, Egypt, and Canada).
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, the majority of the world's
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 is saltwater, but freshwater is primarily composed of ice and glaciers.
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,
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 usage in Egypt and Saudi Arabia is predominantly for agricultural purposes,
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 in Canada,
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 is mainly used in industry. Regarding global
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 distribution, saltwater accounts for 97%.
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, freshwater constitutes a mere 3%. Within the freshwater category, ice and glaciers make up 79%, groundwater comprises 20%, and surface
water
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 represents the smallest proportion at just 1%.
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, with regard to
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 graph, both Egypt and Saudi Arabia allocate the majority of their
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 (approximately 80%) to agriculture.
Water
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 usage for domestic and industrial purposes is nearly identical in both countries, each accounting for about 12%.
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, Canada primarily uses
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 for industrial purposes, with 80% of its
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 directed to
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 sector.
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, agriculture and domestic use are nearly equal at around 10% each.

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