The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram provides key

informations

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information

pieces of information

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about the process of collecting the

rain

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rainwater

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water

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to using it to drink in one nation (Australia).

Overall

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, it is clear from the graph that the process includes about 7 stages, starting from

colecting

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collecting

selecting

the rainwater and

ends

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ending

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with producing clean drinking

water

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According to

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what is shown,

firstly

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they

colect

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collect

the

rain

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rainwater

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water

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secondly

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secondly,

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the

water

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goes to a

water

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filter, after

that

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that,

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they put all of the clean

water

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apply

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big storage. After

that

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that,

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the

water

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goes throw a

thin

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small thin

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and small tube to

onther

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another

storage for the treatment process. There is a small room to

saprait

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spray

the chemicals from the

water

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. And

then

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the

water

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goes the houses throw a

water

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tape and it's

finally

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ready to use.

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Jan 26, 2025

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

128 words

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