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Band 4

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that it is hard to know other
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people
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 nations and
personalityes
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personalities
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 point of view and talk about my opinion as
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strange
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 generation, because of social media
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 and a lot of
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different
 apps celebrties using it to show
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thir
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their
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 new generation start copying those
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famous
people
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 social media styles.
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one
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 is dressing
a
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style that's not representing his character.
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one
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thir
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their
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of course
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were
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 they are or what
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their
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another
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hand
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 sometimes we could till about from witch country they are
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their
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people
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 a sari it is a traditional outfit and it is so
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popular
every
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one
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 world knows about it. In
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 that it is hard to know about some
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 country or characters from the way they
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. But my opinion is that it is not that hard to know all that , in my
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's culture and personality as
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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your essay into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focusing on a single main idea. This can help improve the logical flow of your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines your main argument or standpoint, and the conclusion concisely summarises your position.
task achievement
Expand on your points with more detailed examples or explanations. This can help strengthen your arguments and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
task achievement
Clear up some minor language inaccuracies that may confuse the reader, such as grammar or spelling errors. While they don't heavily impact the score, they can slightly affect clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps the reader follow your main argument.
task achievement
You show awareness of different viewpoints in your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural identity
  • Fashion statement
  • Traditional attire
  • Cultural heritage
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Stereotypes
  • Personal taste
  • Cross-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cultural origins
  • Globalization
  • Context dependence
  • Judgment
  • Character traits
  • Professional environment
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