The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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task response
You have addressed the task well by providing relevant examples and arguments in support of scientific advancements aimed at improving living standards.
task response
Try to provide more specific examples and case studies to strengthen your argument and make it more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Although your essay is generally well-structured, pay attention to small grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Improving this will enhance the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from slightly more logical progression between points, and more explicit transitions between ideas.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion are present, effectively framing your argument about science improving lives.
task response
The essay addresses the topic directly with a clear stance, showing depth of thought on how science impacts human life and the environment.
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