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Band 3

Some people think that higher institutions should concentrate more on academic subjects such as history e and physical science while others say that they should concentrate on practical subject such as mechanics and cookery etc. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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 that higher institutions should focus more on academic
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believe
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,
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practicals
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 is more important ,in
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opinion
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 like history and physical science are more popular and all
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will be a
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helpful
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finish
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 study and they will get a good job .but in my
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opinions
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 important but not more than the practical
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 because they will earn the
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knowledge
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hand
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 other people believe that the practical
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 is more important in
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higher institutions because it will help them to
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 for
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 future career they will manage all the
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 and
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knowledge
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to
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a practical
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 and the academic
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 they should focus on it
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previous
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apply
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specific
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that fit
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 the level and stage of the students to prepare
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them a
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as
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 good citizens.

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task achievement
Try to develop more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, mention how practical skills can directly apply to certain jobs.
coherence cohesion
Work on transitions between ideas for better logical flow. Consider using linking words like 'furthermore', 'in addition', and 'however'.
task achievement
Clarify points and avoid vague expressions or generalizations. This will enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and conclusion, which provides a sense of completeness to your essay. Great job!
task achievement
You've successfully expressed your opinion and responded to the prompt clearly, addressing both views.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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