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The digram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured

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The process illustrates how instant pasta is manufactured.
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, it is an eight-stage, man-made, linear procedure. It begins with flour being transported from storage silos to the mixer and ends with labelling and packaging.
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, flour is delivered to storage silos and
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 transferred to a mixer, where it is combined with water and oil.
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 mixture is thoroughly processed into dough, which is flattened into sheets using rollers.
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, the beans sheets are cut into strips.
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,the noodle sheets are cooked in oil dried to preserve them. Once dried, they are placed into cups
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 vegetables and spices for flavour. Ultimately, the cups are sealed with labels, completing the packaging process. The finished product is
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 ready for distribution.
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, the production of instant noodles is a systematic and organized process that transforms basic ingredients into a ready-to-eat packaged product.

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task achievement
Add more detailed descriptions or additional stages if possible, to enhance the completeness of the response make the essay more engaging.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in using terminology; using both 'dough' and 'sheets' might confuse readers. Stick to one term for clarity.
overall
The essay presents a clear overview of the instant noodle production process with an orderly description of the stages.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured, with a sequence that helps the reader understand how the process flows from start to finish.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion effectively encapsulate the overall process.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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