The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It could be argued that the objective of knowledge is increasing

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human's

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lives

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life

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, despite many

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that it should not. I agree with

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view because there are two main factors that

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people

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condition

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, namely

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quality of their physical and psychological. On the one hand,

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quality of life

become

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worsen

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since the health

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shows a downward tendency. Because many new toxic substances are found in our environment,

people

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need to

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resist

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many

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of diseases.

Covid-15

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COVID-15

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, as for

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example,

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people

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to suffer from a pandemic era

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some new form of viruses made by researchers invention.

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people

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's lives

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deteriorating because of the new innovation, which

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to science etiquette.

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people

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experience

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more stressful and hectic days which create a bad lifestyle.

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is caused by

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more screen time and

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physical activities in their daily routine compared to the past.

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, it proves that

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advanced science has a probability to make

human

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degeradate

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degrade

slowly.

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research from

Indonesian

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an Indonesian

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University stated that 50% of

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employees

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who work in front of

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computers

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have a bad psychological

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, if our generation can optimate the usage of science wisely, they will not overcome

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mental illness. In conclusion,

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develop

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population's

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the population's

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lives is the most vital purpose of technology. I agree with

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argument because

people

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are currently not meeting

better

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quality of

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life for both health

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condition

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and mental status.

handini.yuniartiMon Jan 27 2025

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task achievement

Ensure your main points are well-supported with clear and specific examples. Sometimes the examples used were unclear or not well-connected to the main point, such as the reference to Covid-15. Providing more factual and relevant illustrations can strengthen your arguments.

coherence cohesion

Work on the logical flow of your ideas to improve coherence. It can be improved by using clear linking devices to connect sentences and paragraphs, ensuring that ideas flow smoothly from one to the next.

coherence cohesion

Clarify and organize your ideas more effectively. While there is a logical structure, some sections were hard to follow due to vague connections or unclear points. Additionally, introducing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence might help in setting up what the paragraph will discuss.

coherence cohesion

Review conclusion to ensure it effectively summarizes and encapsulates the main discussion points, aligning them clearly with your thesis.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has an introduction and conclusion, which contribute to the overall structure and organization of the writing.

task achievement

You have addressed both aspects of the question, highlighting both the positive and negative influences of science on human life, which demonstrates a balanced approach to the task.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

crucial role
enhancing
quality of human life
advancements
medicine
healthcare
scientific research
solving societal problems
improving living standards
global issues
climate change
food scarcity
technological advancements
limitations
negative consequences
ethical considerations
sustainability
environmental preservation

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