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Three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK schools in 1981, 1991 and 2002. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main featrures, and make comparisons where relevant.

Three pie charts below shows the changes in annual spending by a particular UK schools in 1981, 1991 and 2002. Summarise the informatin by selecting and reporting the main featrures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
three
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 charts illustrate the
rate
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 of spending by
particular
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a particular
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 UK school during 1981,1991 and
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year
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the year
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 2001.
Overall
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 ,
teachers
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teachers'
teacher's
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 salaries had the majority
rate
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while
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 insurance
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was a
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a
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the
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least
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lowest
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 among
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three
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the three
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 pie
chart
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charts
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. The chart
obvious
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obviously
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 the spending
in
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on
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the
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apply
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insurance had the least
rate
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 during
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three
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the three
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 years
started
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starting
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 from 1981 it
reach
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reached
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to
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apply
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2%
while
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 in the
year
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of
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apply
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1991
reach
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reached
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to
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apply
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3% and
last
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year
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 2001 8% .other
workers
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workers'
worker's
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 salaries
was
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were
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 28% Percentage but
it
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its
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 decline to 22% in the
year
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 of 1991
then
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 it
reach
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reaches
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 to the 15% in
the
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apply
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2001 . In the resources e.g books
reach
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reached
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to
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apply
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15 % and the furniture and equipment had the same
rate
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 in the same
year
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 1981.
resources
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Resources
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 and books
was
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apply
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increas
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increase
increased
 in the
year
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of
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apply
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1991 to 20% and
then
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 9% in the 2001 .furniture and equipment had
the
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a
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 small
rate
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 in the
year
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 of 1991 around 5% only but in the 2001 jump to 23% >teachers salary had
biggest
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the biggest
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 majority in all
three
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 years started from 1991 made up 50 %
Linking Words
then
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than
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 in 2001 reach to 45 % and to 40% in
the
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apply
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1981.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, rate, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Percentage
  • Proportion
  • Allocate
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Trend
  • Expenditure
  • Category
  • Salaries
  • Furniture and equipment
  • Resources
  • Insurance
  • Notable
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparison
  • Decade
  • Shift in priorities
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