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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1957 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, Sweden, Italy and portugal between 1957 and 2007
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The line chart provides information about the average carbon dioxide pollution, in metric
tons
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, per
person
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 in countries
such
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 as the UK, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between the four decades between 1967 and 2007.
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, in all four decades, the highest proportion of average emissions of carbon dioxide per
person
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 was in the United Kingdom,
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 the lowest one was in Portugal. To start with, in 1967, the United Kingdom starting at approximately 10.8
tons
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, experienced a moderate decline and amounted around to 8.3
tons
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 per
person
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 by the end of 2007. Sweden, which has approximately 9.1
tons
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, started sharply and numbered approximately 10.2
tons
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 at the start of 1977.
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, experienced a dramatic decrease by the end of 2007, composing 5.8
tons
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.
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, Italy and Portugal,
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, both experienced growth. In 1967, Italy numbered 4
tons
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person
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, but started gradually growing by the end of 2007, and composed
approximately
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 7.8
tons
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 the same year as Italy, Portugal showed sharp growth until 1997, when it stood the same, composing 5.8
tons
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 per
person
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 by the start of 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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