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Band 6.5

The line graph below shows the household recycling rate in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.

The line graph below shows the household recycling rate in three different countries between 2005 and 2015.
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The line graph provides information about the regional household recycling rate in
tow
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two
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 years from 2005 and 2015.
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, the recycling rates of the
Uk
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UK
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 and Germany showed a steady but significant rise over the
period
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,
while
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 the percentage of recycling
waste
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 in France accounted
a
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for a
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downward trend throughout the
period
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. In 2005 the recycling
waste
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 in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 and Germany
were
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was
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 nearly 35%and 20% respectively. Germany’s rate
increase
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increased
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 sharply during the
period
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 and
exceeding
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exceeded
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the
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apply
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Franc’s
rat
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rate
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 in 2009 at almost 35% and continued to
rose
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rise
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till at
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apply
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below 60% to 59% in the end
period
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.
While
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,
Uk’s
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UK’s
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 recycling
waste
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 in 2005
start
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started
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under
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at
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 35%
then
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increase
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increased
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 to 40% and remained steady until 2009, in the meantime had a rapid surge to about 55% and
then
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hitting
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hit
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the
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a
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 peak
60
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of 60
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% in 2015. In 2005 Franc was the significant number in recycling
waste
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 at exactly 50%
tend
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tended
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 to deep decrease
till
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to
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 the
under
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apply
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ground to
loss
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lose
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 more than half of their percentages by 30% in 2013. In
this
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years
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year
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 the rate
have
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has
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 to move
little
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a little
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 bit to almost 40%
at the end
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 of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, waste with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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