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What's your opinion about using English first language?and what's the language you wish life will use it first

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English is today considered the global lingua franca. It dominates in spheres of international business, technology, science and academia. In political circles, where global economic competitiveness continues to demand the scrutiny of countries' internal educational policy, English has become a formidable 'gatekeeper' (Pennycook, 2008), with the fortunes of individuals and countries at stake. Supporters of English as an International
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 (EIL) claim that the
language
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 is 'neutral', pointing out its universal international utility. Opposing viewpoints maintain that the continued proliferation of the
language
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 is endangering the other languages spoken in the world, increases economic division, and in fact continues to serve mainly
western
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 interests through education systems that have seen little change in their
language
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 policies since colonial times (Phillipson, 2001). Using a brief sociolinguistic history of the Afrikaans
language
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 as a point of departure,
this
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 paper highlights and addresses some of the issues that have come to characterize the debate of EIL. The functions of
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 in society, and specifically its role in the formation and maintenance of knowledge and ideology is critically discussed, drawing partially on South African history,
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 a number of other examples. The paper concludes with a critical analysis of the role of EIL, which, it is argued, cannot necessarily be seen as completely neutral, nor entirely free from the ideological forces in society.,
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 and power "The word does not die like a man… With it, the universe crumbles

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task achievement
Ensure that specific examples are clearly explained and linked to your main points to provide stronger evidence for your arguments.
coherence cohesion
While the logical flow of ideas is quite strong, consider using clearer transitions between some paragraphs to further enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
You have provided a comprehensive introduction and conclusion which effectively frame your essay.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic with clear and comprehensive ideas, demonstrating a good understanding of the subject.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unifying tool
  • widespread
  • international business
  • dominance
  • global communication
  • cultural homogenization
  • regional languages
  • dialects
  • Mandarin Chinese
  • global influence
  • economically
  • culturally
  • Esperanto
  • constructed language
  • ease of learning
  • linguistic equality
  • multilingual model
  • linguistic preservation
  • effective communication
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