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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the numbers of travellers who had
incidents
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 and
injuries
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 by various methods of transport in the year 2002. Units are measured per 100 million passenger miles travelled (
PMT
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).
Overall
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, bus and light
rail
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incidents
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 were the highest with equal figures,
while
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 buses's
injuries
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was
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 markedly the major. Commuter
rail
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 had the lowest cases in both categories. Demands responses were higher in
incidents
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 than in
injuries
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. In terms of
incidents
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, buses and light rails had similar figures, reporting 76
PMT
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 cases each. Followed by heavy
rail
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 which reported 51
PMT
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case
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,
while
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 commuter
rail
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 ranked
last
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 with 20
PMT
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. Demands responses peaked at 225
PMT
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. Regarding
injuries
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, buses remained the leader with 66
PMT
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. Light and heavy
rail
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 figures were significantly close, with the former reporting 39
PMT
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 and the latter 35
PMT
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. Commuter
rail
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 preserves the
last
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 place with only 17
PMT
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. Demands responses were moderately lower in
injuries
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 with 173
PMT
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 compared to
incidents
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, injuries, pmt, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Passenger Miles Travelled (PMT)
  • incidents per 100 million PMT
  • injuries per 100 million PMT
  • transportation type
  • comparative measures
  • statistical analysis
  • proportionate level
  • anomalous data
  • discrepancies in safety figures
  • severity of incidents
  • frequency of occurrences
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