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The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new supermarket (A, B and c) in the city of Ellington. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map below
illustrate
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illustrates
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 three proposal sites A,B,
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C
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and C
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for
builting
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building
 a new supermarket in the
city
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 of Ellington
where
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which
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 have 120000
of
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apply
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polulations
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pollution
.
Overall
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, have a brief look at the 3 sites. A is in the residential
area
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 and near the traffic-free zone.
Site
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 B is
at
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in
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 the most east north part of
countryside
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the countryside
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while
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site
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C
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 is
at
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in
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 the
south
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southern
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 part of the
city
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 where near the
industrail
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industrial
area
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. Look at more details.
The
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Site
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site
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 A is close to the railway which
make
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makes
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 it
convinient
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convenient
 to access.
Also
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 since it
located
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is located
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 in
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a residencial
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residencial
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residential
 part,
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while
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apply
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between one of the industrial
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area
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areas
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 and the park which
adjcent
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is adjcent
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 to the traffic-free zone.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
go
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going
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 northwest direction for 15km, there is another small
city
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 called Hampford which has
30000
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a 30000
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populations
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population
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. The people who
living
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live
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 there may
also
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 come to
Ellingto
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Ellington
. It can offer
site
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 A enough client flow.
On the other hand
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,
site
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C
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 is
also
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 a nice choice, where is at the edge of the
city
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 and countryside,
also
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 near the railway, which is easy
for transporting
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to transport
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. Meanwhile,
site
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C
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 is
also
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 the
most
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apply
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nearist
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nearest
 place to the airport and the bigger industrial
area
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at
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in
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 the south, which can benefit both tourists and the
worker
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workers
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who
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apply
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working
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work
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 there.
Moreover
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,
site
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 B
which
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apply
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is a little bit far away from the
city
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 in the countryside, and only have one motorway to access, which is good for the workers who
working
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work
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 in the
iindustrial
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industrial
area
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at
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in
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south
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the south
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, providing them
a
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with a
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place to
shopping
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shop
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words c, city, area, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proposed sites
  • supermarket
  • locations
  • central
  • outskirts
  • residential areas
  • transport hubs
  • proximity
  • major roads
  • landmarks
  • accessibility
  • competition
  • shopping district
  • industrial area
  • green spaces
  • logistic ease
  • isolated
  • densely populated
  • traffic
  • customer reach
  • expansion possibilities
  • accessibility
  • customer base
  • logistical convenience
  • recommend
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