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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The graph illustrates the
amount
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 of fuels, which are Coal,
Petroleum
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,
Natural
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and Natural
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gas
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, that
had been
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were
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 produced in the UK between the times 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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,
petroleum
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 took the lead
while
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 other gases'
percentage
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percentages
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 stayed relatively low. Looking at the data in greater detail, the biggest gap was between natural
gas
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 and
petroleum
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. At the
begginning
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beginning
 of the period,
petroleum
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 had the highest
per
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percentage
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cent
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 with approximately 90. Meanwhile, natural
gas
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 was the least produced one with nearly 40 per
cent
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.
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, the production level for coal was double
of
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that of
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 natural
gas
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.
Furthermore
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, except for
goal
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the goal
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, the numbers fluctuated during these years.
Petroleum
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 climbed more than 40 per
cent
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.
Nevertheless
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, after staying stable for
few
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a few
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 years, it started to decline slowly. After its drop, it
raised
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rose
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 again
midly
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mildly
. Coal
also
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 had surges. It
descent
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descended
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 sharply in 1984, almost half of its starting proportion.
In contrast
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, natural
gas
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 had a steady increase without
no
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any
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 rapid changes. It ascent only 60 per
cent
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 until the end of 2000. In summary, except for natural
gas
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, coal and
petroleum
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 faced both
with
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apply
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upward and downward trends. Natural
gas
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,
on the other hand
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, had no striking differences.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petroleum, gas, cent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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