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Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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These days,public debate has been going on over whether the pupils pay all financial costs for their
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 rather than provide free. I strongly disagree and in
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 essay, I will examine the arguments and provide relevant examples . On the one hand , there are a variety of reasons why people can not able to pay all costs for tertiary
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.First and foremost, Some
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 do not have the financial possibility to complete these aims and goals from
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 so when the university helps their
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consequently
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,they will be motivated to go ahead with their
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 and encouraged to get a high band for their major.To illustrate , Sohar University helps
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 by giving them some financial
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assistance to build businesses around the educational institutions.
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,the contribution of financial aid for
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 is considered a good
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 for
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 and
university
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 itself.
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, a range of
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 register and join universities which have a good reputation
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this
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 improves
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 performance in
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 and challenges the obstacles in their life
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. The Omani Educational Association indicated some Universities have free
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 for all
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.
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, it supplies
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 to achieve their ambitions in life. In conclusion, I am convinced that providing free
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studies
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 is more beneficial in our societies.The government should incorporate universities to help the
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 to complete their
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 without financial conflict.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly to the next; linking words can help improve this.
Task Achievement
Ensure your ideas are fully developed and clearly structured. You have a clear stance, but some arguments could be expanded further for deeper understanding.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion clearly present your stance and summarise the main arguments.
Task Achievement
You've used relevant examples that align well with your main points, especially the example about Sohar University.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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