Large business's have big budget for promotions and advertisement and as a result people gravitate towards theM. What problems does this cause. What could be done to encourage people to buy local products.

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Most important companies have spent several
mounts
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of money on
advertisement
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advertisements
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for
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taking
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more and more clients,
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, people only are focusing on
buy
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products offered by these corporations, affecting local
business
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businesses
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.
This
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essay will discuss the problem mentioned above and a possible solution.
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,
growing
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up of
giants
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corporations affect directly to
regional
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the regional
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economy. When a business starts it needs new clients for its development,
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, if people show interest only
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large
business
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businesses
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, do not help to
improving
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local products.
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known Colsubsidio market in Colombia went bankrupt
due to
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the competition done by
Metro
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the Metro
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market which is a bigger market.
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, knowing the great quality of stocks offered by
little
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small
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brands may encourage
population
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to help
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the region
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region
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economy.
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, free promotions on social
medias
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media
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as Facebook could be a good option for showing the
potencial
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potential
of new brands.
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, Bruna, a fashion lingerie trademark created in Medellin, began with free advertisement on Instagram
,
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but now is the most recognized trademark in Colombia.
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, it is not necessary
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big
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a big
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budget for advertisements. If individuals give the opportunity to know provincial factories, it may increase the
sells
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of the new factories.

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