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Writing Samples
Band 6

The bat chart below gives information about how familes in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information and make comparison.

The bat chart below gives information about how familes in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information and make comparison.
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The given line chart shows information related to weekly salary usage from every household in one country
at
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 1968 and 2018. In conclusion, every family in 1968 and 2018 have different
interest
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interests
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to
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in
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 spending their own
money
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. In 1968, 35
percent
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per cent
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 of weekly income
has been
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was
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 used to provide food for the households. Food was the highest
money
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 spending between all of the given sectors. The second highest were on clothing and footwear and
also
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 housing. These both sectors share the same percentage which reached 15% spend from their weekly income. The least
spend
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 was on fuel and power which
reach
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reached
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 6%. In 2018, people were more interested
to used
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in using
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 their
money
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 to provide leisure which accounted
to
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for
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 23%
from
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of
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 their weekly salary. The next was housing which reached 19% of investment, followed by food
that
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 reached 18%. Fuel and power were still the least
money
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usage
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 in 2018, 4% of households
spend
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spent
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 their weekly income
to
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on
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 those sectors.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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