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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some believe that education success is based on good teachers and others believe that it depends upon student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant example

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The map
illustartes
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illustrates
 the floor plan of a public library between 20 years ago and now.
Firstly
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, the
room
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 located in the top-left corner has increased in size. There were only some CDs, videos,
computer
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 games in the
room
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. But
thesedays
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these days
, it
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 into
a storying events
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a storying event
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,
asa
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as
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,
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 there are two groups of
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the sofa
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sofa
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 at
top-left
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the top-left
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 and bottom-right. There is a children's fiction
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books
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 near the door. In the top-right, there is a lecture
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instead
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 of
Children''
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Children 'sbooks
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. In
addtion
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addition
, about the intermediate region, we can see there are
an
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Adult fiction
books
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 on
the the
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both sides, and there are tables and chairs in the middle of the library.
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, the Tables and Chairs are
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cancel
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 nowadays. All reference
books
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 replace the adult
ficition
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fiction
books
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 on the left. There increase
a
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 Self-service machines behind Adult fiction
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,
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 and the Information desk in the middle.
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, there was a reading
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 which had some newspapers and magazines
in
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bottom
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 left of the map,
the
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 Enquiry desk ( tickets, book returns and so on)
in
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the bottom-right
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bottom-right
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bottom right
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 of the map. But now, there
are
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 only a Computer
room
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 on the left
,
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 and a Cafe on the right.

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language
Ensure to check for grammatical errors and typos, such as 'illustartes' instead of 'illustrates' and 'addtion' instead of 'addition'. Correct spelling and grammar increase clarity and effectiveness of your writing.
coherence
The essay could improve coherence by ensuring each paragraph logically flows from one point to another. Currently, the jump between discussing different parts of the library is somewhat disjointed.
structure
More clearly defined paragraphs with distinct topics would improve the logical structure. For example, dedicate separate paragraphs to each time period comparison or functional area of the library.
content
The essay does a decent job of comparing changes in the library layout over time, which is the main task in the question prompt.
content
The introductory sentence clearly presents the topic and what the essay will describe.
language
The essay attempts to use specific location terms (e.g., 'top-left corner', 'bottom-right'), which is helpful in describing maps and diagrams.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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