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The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give the distribution of world population in 1950 and 2000, with an estimate of the situation in 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate the density of the
population
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 in six various regions of the world between 1950 and 2000, with its prediction
in
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 2050.
Overall
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, the total number of
inhabitahts
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inhabitants
 living on Earth increases throughout the period.
It is clear that
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 the most populated areas are Africa, Asia, and Europe,
whereas
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 the lowest percentage of people live in Latin
America
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,
Nourth
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North
America
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, and Oceania. Focusing first on the general
number of
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world
population
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, in 1950, 2.5
bilion
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billion
 of citizens
reside
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 the globe,
whereas
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by
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 2000,
this
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 figure rose by 3.5 billion. With regard to the future,
this
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 proportion is expected to go up even more, by 3,0 billion
of
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residents in 2050. As for the distribution of the
population
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, in 1950,
neary
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nearly
 10% and 20% lived in Africa and Europe,
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 by 2000 these areas accounted for roughly 13% of the general number of people in the world. By 2050, the
population
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 of Africa is predicted to increase by more than 5%, as opposed to Europe, as the expected proportion of residents in
this
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 area is 50% lower than in 2000. With respect to Asia, the percentage of its citizens remains constant over the
peroiod
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period
, with roughly 60% of inhabitants living there. Regarding Latin
America
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 and North
America
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, nearly 6% of people
lived
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 there, with the following increase of
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 figure in Latin
America
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 by almost 10% by 2050,
while
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 in North
America
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 the situation is going to be
opposite
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the opposite
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, with less than 5% of citizens choosing
this
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 region by the end of the period. As for
the
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Oceania, the situation there remains
unchangable
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unchangeable
during
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 100 years, with only 1% of residents preferring
this
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 territory.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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