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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy.

The popularity of solar energy as
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 source of household power has been increasing. In my opinion,
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 alternative can be a double-edged sword for the users. In
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 essay, I will examine both extremes. At the outset, the newer alternative produces less harmful elements for the environment. As we all know,
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traditional fossil
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 dangerous to our atmospheric layers, resulting in a phenomenon that we call climate change.
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, as the awareness
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 matter grew continuously, people began to try
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 fresh invention.
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, family units
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 used fossil fuel to start water heaters, now utilize solar panels to
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 the job. The process doesn't produce toxic leftovers.
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, using
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 option can reduce the
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 impacts
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 our surroundings.
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, the economic factor can be
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 to the development of
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 innovation.
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,
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 technology is still more expensive than the previous one. Pricing is, of course, an important point one would consider before switching their house's power source. To illustrate, the conventional gas stove is significantly lower in price than the electrical one. We would need a higher capital in the beginning to be able to afford the sun-powered
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.
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more environmentally friendly technology can dramatically increase our expenses for house needs.
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,
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solar energy is the better option for the environment despite
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 high cost, and
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 of the day, the benefit outweighs the concern
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 the long run.

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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that each point you make is thoroughly explored. For instance, you could provide a broader range of examples for both the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy.
task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the economic factor as a disadvantage, perhaps by discussing long-term economic benefits vs short-term costs.
coherence cohesion
Maintain logical progression by making sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next. This will enhance the coherence of your essay.
coherence cohesion
You provide a clear introduction and conclusion, setting the context and summarizing your points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your essay presents a logical structure with distinct paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages.
task achievement
You've addressed the task effectively, discussing both advantages and disadvantages of solar energy.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable energy
  • Subsidies
  • Tax credits
  • Photovoltaic cells
  • Efficiency
  • Off-grid
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Initial investment
  • Energy security
  • Sustainability
  • Decarbonization
  • Grid parity
  • Feed-in tariff
  • Energy storage systems
  • Payback period
  • Net metering
  • Silicon panels
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