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In the digital age, photography has become more accessible to everyone. Some people believe that this has improved the quality of photos, while others argue that professional photography is losing its value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today's non-stop evolution of technology, the photography field is gaining a strong presence in every area, from domestic situations to professional sessions. It means
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 feature is more
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accessible
 and affordable than before.
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, several brands
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continuously
 creating
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 with cameras on
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. In
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 context, some people support the idea that
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 modern reality permits users to be more creative when they are taking pictures,
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 others refuse
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 insight, as they believe
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 art expression is losing value. From my point of
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view, I concur
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 second stated notion, since many users use
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 expression to evoke plenty of artistic scenarios which are worthy to be admired. In
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 before my personal viewpoint. On the one hand, having a
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smartphone
 allows
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 to experiment
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variety of camera functions
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 brightness, portrait mode, and filters.
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 abilities
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encourage
 society to take pictures
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 a high-level
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quality
 to be shared on social media or other
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.
For instance
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, the brand Apple has designed a cutting-edge
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mobile
 phone that includes state-of-the-art cameras that have been used to capture and record special materials for movies,
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 shows and artistic poses.
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 brand often uses its incredible imagery outcomes to
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permeate
 society the need od
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their
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 products.
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, there are several individuals who
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don't
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high-quiality
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high-quality
 devices to capture artistic scenarios,
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instead
, they are capturing simple imagery which
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 not evoke anything.
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 not steal value
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 the art itself, since every person is free to create data on their devices.
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, many humans derive so much pleasure from doing
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 hobby, and not necessary they have to be icons to practice it. In conclusion, the constant creation of devices with photo functions
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 the community to
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 taking pictures.
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, there is a chance to dabble in
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 artistic expression by changing several settings to improve the capture.
Nevertheless
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, being active in
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amateur
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 do not demerit the ones who practice
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language
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'accesible' instead of 'accessible', 'continuosly' instead of 'continuously', and 'quiality' instead of 'quality'.
language
Ensure you clarify complex ideas more effectively. Some sentences are a bit convoluted and could be simplified for clearer understanding.
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While you mentioned both views and provided some examples, enhancing the depth of examples and explanations can strengthen your response and illustrate your points better.
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The essay outlines both perspectives on the impact of digital photography, providing a balanced view.
structure
Your structures are logical and there's a clear introduction and conclusion.
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The essay acknowledges various aspects of modern photography, like phone technology affecting art, which is insightful.
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