The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate
compare
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and compare
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Canadian
citizen
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citizens
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(between the
age
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ages
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18
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of 18
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and 15)
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to
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diferent
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different
devices they used to watch television
by
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apply
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it
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in 2009 and 2019 . From
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overall
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an overall
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perspective ,
conventional
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the conventional
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TV
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percentage significantly
decline
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declined
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between the two given
period
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periods
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,
While
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other devices faced
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an increased
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increased
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in the
numbers
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number
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of
users
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At the onset , in 2009 ,the largest proportion of devices was conventional
TV
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with 34%
while
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laptop
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laptops
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came
at
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in
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the
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second place
with
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at
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20%
this
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was followed
with
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desktop computer and mobile phone
users
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with 18% ,
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and 15
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% respectively .
However
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, flat-screen
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tv
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TVs
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and
tablet
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tablets
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came with the least
users
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during
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in
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2009 with 8% for mobile
phone
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phones
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,
5
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and 5
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% for
the
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apply
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tablet
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tablets
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.
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,
during
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in
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2019 the picture
change
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changed
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significantly ,the percentage of mobile
phone
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phones
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and
flat-screen
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flat screens
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were close to each other
with
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by
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almost 27% .Tablet faced a dramatic
increased
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increase
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in the number of
users
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with 19%
this
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was
following
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followed
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with
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by
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laptop and desktop computer
users
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with 12% for both of them
while
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conventional
TV
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was the one with
least
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the least
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number of Canadian
users
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with only 4%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • comparison
  • device
  • traditional TV
  • laptop
  • mobile phone
  • tablet
  • streaming services
  • usage
  • trend
  • shift
  • technological advancements
  • viewing habits
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