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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

It is argued that there is a huge amount of wasted food in the entire world daily.
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 is rooted in several reasons, But, there are some measures
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 be taken to tackle
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 a vexingly complicated issue. First of all, It is worth mentioning that
wasting
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 of materials is originated from numerous causes. In
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 regard,
social economic
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 situation and
cutural
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cultural
 approaches can be addressed. In terms of financial status, a direct correlation can be established between
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wealth and food disposal. The more
country
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the country
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 is wealthy, the more people make trash in their meals.
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, the United States produce tons of
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rubbish
everyday
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that
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is
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 a jaw-dropping figure compared to African nations.
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, the lack of effective education,
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 a bad culture of consumption, results in the emergence of an inappropriate public consumption manner. Here are some practical
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 for high-ranking officials to address
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 challenging issue.
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, imposing laws on production and the usage of
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 can be beneficial.
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, the government should take more tax from individuals who play a greater role in waste production.
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 to that, many documentaries and
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 programs can be effective
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 and
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 the different classes of society about its disastrous consequences. So, a portion of the taxes taken in the previous
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 is invested in cultural plans. In conclusion, there is a great deal of disposal of
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 globally
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 a daily basis.
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, various reasons cause that
contagous
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contagious
 illness, the related organizations should attempt to reduce its amount and consequences by warning and lawmaking.

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