Some people argue that parents should have a strong influence on their children's choice of friends and life partners. Others believe that young people shoulda make these decisions independently. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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sevarel
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several

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humans argue that
parents
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must to a strong impact on their
cheldren’s
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children’s

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choice
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clothe
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people
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who
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friends
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and
life
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partner
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partners

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for
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forever.
However
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many
people
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belive
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believe

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that
youngester
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younger

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people
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neet
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need

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to
do
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these resolution
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this resolution
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independently. In
this
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essay will
given
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give
be given

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different
advices
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advice

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as well as
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why
parents
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’ and young
people
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’s decisions play a big in our
life
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way. All our the world has many different types of
people
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. When
people
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young
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are young

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do not have a big experience
for found
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relable
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reliable
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and clothe
people
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so
that
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apply

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our
parents
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always need to
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choice
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choose

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for us
them
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bacause
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parents
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have unusual
experice
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experiences

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about
lifeway
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in any
sitotions
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situations
situation

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and actions.
In
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addition
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addition,

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parents
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always
thinking
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think

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of our
lifeway
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any time
for
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our future. On top of that these days
has
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unreal and unbelievable
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so that our
parents
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know who is better for
continue
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continuing

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life
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who
is does
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not
metter
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for
exaple
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example

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friends
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or
life
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partner
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and other
people
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. Nowadays we live in
a
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envorenmantal
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environmental

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and very modern
life
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so that our civilization is quite fast
that is
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why young
people
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thinking
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think

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of about
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and
wife
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wives

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. On top of
that
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they want to
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choice
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indepentently
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clothe
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clothes

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people
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and now
youngesters
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youngsters

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started
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started to

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choose
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their own
decision
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decisions

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but maybe they are
doing
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many mistakes
for
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to

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choose them because they do not have
a
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apply

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few
experince
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experience
experiences

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for
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choice
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personal.
However
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many young
people
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say it is our
life
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so that we
neet
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need

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to make a decision
for
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to

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choose
friends
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and
life
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partner
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but they do not know one mistake can change their
life
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90 degrees so that always
parents
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show
relable
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reliable
relatable

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and
passed
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pass

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the test
lifeway
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. In
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conclusion
conclussion
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conclusion

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:
i
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gave whole information about
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parents
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my parents

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and personal
decision
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decisions

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for
choice
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our
friends
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and
life
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partner
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and explained why they are important
for
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us in
a
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our
lifeway
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