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Some people think that to lead a successful life, a university degree is important. Others believe that this is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that these days that
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the
university
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degree
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 has been playing a significant role in our life. The question is,
does
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 that important today? In
this
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essay
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i
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 am going to discuss
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 issue. first of all,
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university
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degree
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one of
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the essential
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method
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 best
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. To explain, the
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 who continue to study at
university
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 and college
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 a perfect
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 in bag companies or government.
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 sector is increasing who
people
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have
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 certification
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. In
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additionally
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,
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 of
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background
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 with
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 technology which
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use
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on
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 daily life.
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,
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job
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 and
deal
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 with new technology are the
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major benefits
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university
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a university
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degree
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.
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, some
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argued
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 that
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education qualification is not essential today. To clarify, a number of business
people
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 established their companies
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due
 to experience and skill . As
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the
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university
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degree
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 is not a point to be successful the
people
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.
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, the
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hibermarket
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hypermarket
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 by Muhammad Ali who was working in
small
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a small
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 shop and doesn't able to continue school
study
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due to
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 boor.
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experience
sometimes
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alternative
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the
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university
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degree
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. In conclusion,
the
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university
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degree
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 from
people
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offer
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 a number of
benefit
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benefits
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 including
best
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job
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 and good
user
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use
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to
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 technology.
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 the deep experience is a good alternative sometimes.

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Task Achievement
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar to enhance clarity and convey your ideas more effectively.
Task Achievement
Ensure that your main points are consistently supported by clear examples or explanations throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve coherence by making sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Use linking words appropriately to guide the reader.
Introduction
You clearly introduced the topic and provided a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
Conclusion
You included a conclusion that summarizes the main points effectively.
Task Response
You provided examples to support your argument, which helps in demonstrating relevance to the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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  • skill set
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  • lifelong learning
  • meritocracy
  • practical experience
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  • critical thinking
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