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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides key information about generation levels of fuel,
that
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apply
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divided
for
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into
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 three categories
such
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 as coal, natural
gas
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, and
petroleum
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 in the United Kingdom from 1981 to 2000. The units are measured in energy.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the production level of
the
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apply
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fuel in the
Uk
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UK
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 to
grow
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growing
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.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the percentage of
the
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apply
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Petroleum
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 and Natural
gas
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was
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apply
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increase
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increased
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 during the time,
whereas
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 the Cole
begins
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began
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 with
high
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a high
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and than
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than
Correct your spelling
then
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 continue dropped.
According to
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 what
in
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is
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showing
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shown
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 there was
gradual
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a gradual
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 rise in
Petroleum
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 from 90 to 140 from 1981 to 1984
then
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 began a fluctuation in
same
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the same
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 number, after that it
is
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was
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 dumping to 100 ,
while
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 between 1992 to 2000 it
rised
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raised
rose
rise
 considerably to 140. The proportion of
the
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apply
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Cole
start
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starts
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in
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at
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 80
while
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in
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from
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 1983 to 1984 the graph shows
it
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apply
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a dramatic drop to 40
then
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 it rises to 60 and
countinue
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continues
 a
flactuatin
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fluctuation
fluctuating
.
While
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the
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apply
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Natural
gas
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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remained stable between 1981 to 1990 after that
rise
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rose
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 to 100 in 2000. In terms of the fuel in the
Uk
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UK
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 like
Petroleum
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 and Natural
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gas
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gas,
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 all of those
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 high in 2000 rather than Cole occurs to
deceases
Verb problem
decrease
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 in 2000

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, petroleum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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