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The bar charts display the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

The bar charts display the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of three different
nutriments
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nutrients
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 in breakfast, dinner, lunch, and snacks, if those nutrients are consumed in excess may lead to health problems.
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, it is evident that the amount of sodium and saturated fat in dinner is high,
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 added sugar is used in excess during snacks.
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, at the time of lunch, all the minerals are relatively used in similar portions.
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 with, in the US, the most uses of sodium and saturated fat are accounted for dinner, with 43% and 37%, respectively.
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, during the period of breakfast in typical food items, all the supplements are consumed in between the ratio of 14-16%.
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, during lunchtime salted, oily, and sugary foods portion in any dishes decreased significantly, with 29%, 26%, and 19%, respectively.
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, the same pattern is seen for snacks, but it surged upward with the percentages from 14-42%.

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