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It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write atleast 250 words.

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It has been
an
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increasingly common for
consumers
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 to purchase a few
clothes
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 with
high
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higher
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 prices than numerous cheaper ones.
This
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 trend may be driven by several reasons,
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 arguments are valid from both sides. From my perspective,
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buying expensive
clothes
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 is more advantageous than buying low-
price
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 ones. One major
benefits
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 of
this
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 behavior is the high
quality
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 expensive
clothes
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provide
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.
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 the fact that
,
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clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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 that are
setted
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set
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 at a relatively higher
price
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 may use advanced raw materials
such
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 as cashmere, which may raise the cost of production.
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, firms need to sell them at a higher
price
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 in order to cover the cost.In
this
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 case,
consumers
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 can enjoy goods
with
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 better
quality
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, which may have stronger durability.
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,
limit
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 the number of
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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 can be
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly. Since
people
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 tend to trace
the
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fashion
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 and change preferences frequently and constantly, the number of unwanted
clothes
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 may rise. If
people
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 do not
recyle
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recycle
 them properly, unnecessary
wastes
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waste
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 may be generated.
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, some
people
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 may lay their emphasis on the brand effects. Some of the products have higher
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price
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prices
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 because the company that owns them is a luxury commercial, which may amplify the value of the products.
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, it is possible for customers
enjoy
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the
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clothes
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 with the same
quality
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 at a lower
price
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.
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, having a large amount of cheap
clothes
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 brings convenience to
people
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 who are working in the field of
fashion
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.
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 can be explained by the frequency of changes in
fashion
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 styles, which
promotes
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consumers
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, especially those
work
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who work
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 in
fashion
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, to pursue the trend by purchasing
clothes
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 regularly. In
this
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 circumstance, payments for clothing may be reduced when buying
clothes
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 from fast
fashion
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 stores
such
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 as Zara. In conclusion,
although
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 having lots of cheap
clothes
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 can reduce the cost and avoid extra payments for luxury brands, it
bring
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brings
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 more benefits to buy a few expensive
clothes
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, since
consumers
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 can enjoy a higher
quality
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 cloth with better durability and protect the environment by
declining
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the
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unnecessary
wastes
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waste
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.

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task achievement
Ensure to provide specific examples to support your views for a higher scoring.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.
task achievement
Main points are logically structured and supported with relevant arguments.
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