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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka
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UAE Government Spending The UAE government's budget allocation reflects its priorities
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 economic growth, security, and social welfare. The largest share goes to social security (AED 100
billion
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), ensuring financial stability for citizens. Health and personal social services (AED 53
billion
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)
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 receive significant funding, emphasizing public well-being. Education (AED 38
billion
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) is another major area, supporting schools and workforce development. Defense (AED 22
billion
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) and law and order (AED 17
billion
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) highlight the government's focus on national security. Housing, heritage, and the environment (AED 15
billion
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) show efforts to improve living conditions and sustainability. Infrastructure is
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 prioritized, with transport (AED 9
billion
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) boosting connectivity. Industry, agriculture, and employment (AED 13
billion
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) aid economic diversification. Other expenditures and debt interest receive AED 23
billion
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 each.
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, the UAE's budget ensures balanced development, reinforcing its position as a prosperous and secure nation.

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