The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010.

The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows data about the average Saturday sales of two bakeries in London in 2010.
The bar chart compares the proportion of average Saturday sales made by two confectioneries in London in 2010.
Overall
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, Bernie's buns made more sales each Saturday.
While
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the doughnuts were the most purchased desserts, rolls were the least preferred by customers of both bakeries. Doughnuts, which reached peaks in their shops, were the bestselling desserts in both Lovely
Loaves
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and Bernie's buns, showing around 140 and 120 respectively. The figures of cakes, cookies, toasted sandwiches and crisps accounted
as
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the next purchased ones, representing around
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apply
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75 to 120 in Bernie's buns and approximately between 45 and 80 items in Lovely
Loaves
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. Fresh
loaves
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and salads Lovely
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on the other hand
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, were favoured by clients more than
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, illustrating a different trend. The lowest level of desserts, which were sold by confectioners, occurred to rolls, having approximately more or less similar rates above 20.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words loaves with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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