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Some people focus on news in their country, while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Hello my dear cousin, hope you are doing well. I
do
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would
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 like to say
congralulation
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congratulations
congratulation
 about receiving the scholarship which
is
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will
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 help you. I would like to explain the three major positive points of having a
college
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 degree.
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The first benefit is that
last
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 year,
while
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 I was looking for a job on the Linkdin, I figured out that most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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companies hire someone who has at least
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college
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a college
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 degree.
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The second benefit is that you can find
job
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a job
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thorought
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thorough
through
 colleges more
easier
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easily
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 than when you don't go to
the
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apply
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college
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 because in
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apply
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college
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 you have to pass
internship
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an internship
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 course which is a good
wat
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way
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 to connect you to your career.
Body paragraph 3
The third benefit is that
the
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apply
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when you
a
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have a
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university degree,
then
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 your average salary is more than the people who don't
have
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have one
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.
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I
do
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would
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 like to tell you student loans are not bad because not only you can earn and manage your money and paid off
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at
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in
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 the end but
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also
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they also
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it
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apply
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gives
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give
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 you
a
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apply
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good credit in the long term.
Body paragraph 5
In conclusion, I'm happy for you to have a scholarship and I do
recommand
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recommend
 you
to
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apply
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go to school
and
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apply
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also
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 student loans are not bad in the long term.
Body paragraph 6
Best wishes,
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Niyousha

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language
Ensure to correct spelling errors such as 'congralulation' to 'congratulation' and 'thorought' to 'through'.
content
In your points, provide more specific examples and details to support your statements. For instance, explain how internships lead to job opportunities in greater detail.
structure
Improve the structure of your essay. Start with a clear introduction stating your main points. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, clearly separated from others.
content
You have a clear intention to discuss the benefits of having a college degree, which is a good foundation for the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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