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Some people think that individuals should be responsible for reducing pollution, while others say it is the government’s duty. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to
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 several individuals,
people
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 should be the ones who
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have
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 to work in terms of diminishing
pollution
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while
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 a proportion of
people
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 argue that,
government
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the government
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 must
take
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make
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 the necessary regulations. I believe that both citizens and governments must take
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 issue into consideration, as it poses
serious
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a serious
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 threat to
environment
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the environment
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.
However
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,
government's
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the government's
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 impact would be more efficient since it can apply penalties.
This
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 essay will explore both notions and give my perspective. On the one hand,
pollution
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 results in
variety
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a variety
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 of consequences. It is not only detrimental
for
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to
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 nature, but is
also
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 harmful
for
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to
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 human health. Society is one of the primary
cause
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causes
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for
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of
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this
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.
For example
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,
relience
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reliance
 on cars has increased significantly throughout
the
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apply
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time.
Moreover
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,
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the numbers
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numbers
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for
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of
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 risky toxins
also
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 has
rised
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risen
raised
 as well.
Thus
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, citizens' contribution to
pollution
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 cannot be underestimated and it is their responsibility to decrease their excessive
relience
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reliance
 on
vehichles
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vehicles
.
Instead
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, other alternatives can be used as public transportation.
On the other hand
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, carbon
emmissions
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emissions
 and toxic gases are not only related
with
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to
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people
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. Industries and factories are another crucial aspect. All around the world, these plants work non-stop and they constantly release things
to
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into
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air
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the air
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, which can cause the deterioration of the world's temperature.
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,
this
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 can lead to climate change and much worse situations.
Thus
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,
this
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 can only be prevented by governments. 
In addition
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, they can make
investment
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investments
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 in the manner of public transportation,
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this
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which
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 can encourage
people
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 to use it rather than cars. If they can apply laws or punishments to plants that do
no
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not
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 use filters, and take necessary actions
such
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 as regular controls,
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
pollution
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 would be inevitable. In conclusion, even though
people
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 are responsible for affecting the environment negatively,
goverments
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governments
government
 play a significant role in
this
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 and it would be a lot more
benefical
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beneficial
 if they
apply
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applied
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 new rules and
take
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took
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 precautions.

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grammar
Ensure grammatical accuracy, particularly subject-verb agreement and word choice.
content
Strengthen the clarity of your arguments by providing more nuanced examples and elaboration on your points.
coherence
Add more transitional phrases to improve the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
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Your essay presents a clear position on the issue, acknowledging both sides of the argument.
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Good use of relevant examples to illustrate your points regarding pollution and government involvement.
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